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[Freak-on-a-Leash]

[Freak-on-a-Leash]

oh bummer my bad it seems its not a clasified section at all..........solly admins

[curtis2]

good job

too many words
too many images
too little style

[Freak-on-a-Leash]

yeh i know i cant sell it all in 2 words and one image alone...im a failure.....hehe no hard feelings i know what you mean

[curtis2]

Originally Posted by Freak-on-a-Leash

yeh i know i cant sell it all in 2 words and one image alone

actually the whole point is you can

[Freak-on-a-Leash]

no I cant......i am unable to....... pls help me

[Freak-on-a-Leash]

my biggest worry is why doesnt this show in the classifieds section.....instead it shows up as a regular thread here

[curtis2]

no seriously, that's the least of your worries.

I'm sure Lola can set u straight.

[AKA]

Oh? are you doing food photography these days?

FFS Chef, this is the same copy you originally posted, that was sub-edited by Lola (costumers)

You should let "comestible imagery" go - it really sounds awful, said outloud

Perhaps you should just choose 4 of what you consider to be your best photos (1 meat, 1 veg, 1 alcohol, 1 pastry) and make them biger, so people can actually see them? right now, you have too many graphics and to much text fighting for attention

and honestly, the copy consists mainly of overclaim and irrelevance, because you are trying too hard to convince people that you know what you are doing. Frankly, it means nothing that you have been passionate about food since 16. And the opening sentence is trying to win the award for saying food and beverage as many times as possible...if you take those words out of the sentence, the whole thing fals flat

my advice would be to pick the really good images, and lead with your special offer

let the pictures do all the talking: they are better at it than you!

then all you need is the contact details

[Load Toad]

I would suggest you drop all the stuff about discounts too. You are offering discounts for first time buyers - so if I do business with you again my prices go up? And 25% (more discount?) if I come to your studio?
Just leave all that for when an interested party contacts you to discuss pricing. Or - just a one-liner 'Introductory offer - 25% discount now until October 1st'. Too much about discounts imho just undermines the value you consider your work has.

Your photography is very good - let that do the talking and keep the text minimal and based on the copy that Lola provided.